I have to write a short story for my English class and it has to be based on a fear. I was wondering if it was kind of too gory or too cliche, but here’s the idea.

Sarah (the main character) lives on a street full of small family shops. Each family on that street hate each other. Her family owns a pastry shop, same with her next door neighbors.
Well, one day she just came home from buying flour and sugar and when she’s about to walk into her house, she hears yelling. The yelling comes from next door. The owner is shouting at his daughter (Hellen) and blaming her for loosing their business. When actually, it was Sarah’s family who made Hellen and her family out of business.
Hellen has been missing from school for a couple of days and Sarah suspects that she is staying home, trying to help out. Hellen has been beaten by both her parents. They have no more food and no money to survive. So Hellen wants to get revenge from Sarah and her family.
One night, Sarah’s parents are going to a dinner party because it is her aunts birthday. Sarah has to babysit her two younger brothers.
While Sarah is watching tv downstairs, she hears a crashing sound from upstairs. Sarah quickly goes upstairs and finds the bathroom window broken to pieces. She quickly go checks on her younger brothers. They are still sleeping, unhurt.
Sarah runs downstairs to call the police. As she’s talking to them, she grabs a big knife and holds it to her side. Her back is to the whole kitchen and when she’s done talking to the police, she hangs up and turns around.
She screams as she see’s a girl with black hair standing a few feet away from Sarah. On each side, she’s carrying two heads. The heads of Sarah’s younger brothers.
The girl drops the heads and runs after Sarah with an ax. Sarah manages to run out the front door and run over to the park.
note: Sarah loves to run and she’s pretty tall.
Sarah looses the girl and hides in the bushes of a nearby park. She sits there moaning and crying for about an hour, until she’s convinced that she lost the girl.
Sarah leaves the park and instead of going to her house, she speed walks over to the main street where the police station is.
She takes the back roads and tries to find someone that could help her.
Sarah finds a girl with blond hair walking on the other side of the street. She runs over the blond girl and talks to her for help. The blond girl is carrying a black a wig and her head is down. She talks nonsense to Sarah and looks up at Sarah. Sarah recognizes the face of the girl and when she remembers, Hellen kills her.
Now it goes to the parents point of view.
They walk in the front door and turn on the lights. They look around to what happened in the living room. Blood stained the floors and walls and they go into the kitchen. A blond girl (Hellen) is standing there with her head bowed and three heads in front of her on the ground.

and it ends!!

so what do you think of the outline? just wondering if there should be some small things changed like how Hellen kills Sarah and the two younger brothers.

thanks if you read that really long outline!
huh? what’s P.A.SS.

Obviously I’m not, because I have no idea what you’re talking about
Swann~

I’m not going to explain all of the gore since it’s on Sarah’s point of view, she’s going to glance at the heads for a half a second.

Yea, that’s a pretty good idea. I think cutting heads would be over board. Maybe Hellen just stabs them and drags them downstairs.
no i’m not going to do pranks. this is a girl who wants REVENGE.
there are true stories where spouses kill their spouses because they are jealous and want revenge off of them

A bit of humor...


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